Mass Effect: Human Revolution

Hey folks, IgnusDei here, writer of Mass Effect: Human Revolution. How ya doin?

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7920322/1/Mass_Effect_Human_Revolution#

Someone put up my fanfiction.net story up here on the Mass Effect Crossover Recommendations thread, and it seems I've written a story that is actually good! No one is more surprised about this than I am! Still, questions have been asked, and the comments system on fanfiction.net doesn't make for a good public dialogues, so here I am, ready to respond to any question you may have, and listen to your feedback.

And if you haven't read this story before, well, I hope you enjoy it!

I noted that Saren has even more toys than in canon, and in hindsight I realized that it's not that different from medi-gel - though the Council will stroke their fingers at the crazy humans for inventing insane technology, they'll still use that technology if it's useful... with enough regulations that the public gets the watered-down versions while the Spectres get the good stuff.

I will admit to enjoying the story very much. I also enjoyed how you didn't spare the reader puanches. It made a refreshing change from the standard " Crossover character joins sheperds crew, adding dialogue but not changing much". Spoilers ahead: Though the thought that Cerberus might bring Jin back just occured to me. Unlikely has it may be. END of spoilers. Finally I want to express the improvements made in the shift in the crew aquiring quest. Like I mentioned, it's good to see change from the standard formula.

One part I disliked though, was the Garrus torture scene. It kind of seemed out of place with the rest of the vibe of the story. Also I would very much enjoy deeper insight into Adams backstory. Merely a personnel prefrerance of course.

Overall, a very good crossover and fic in general. It blends elements for both Deus Ex and Mass Effect quite well.

I love the whole "comedy of errors" vibe running throughout everything. Jensen has the experience and the augs to take on damned near anything and everything, but the universe(AKA you-the-author) just loves screwing with him, throwing him false leads and dropping him unprepared into ridiculous situations. It actually feels more like ME2 or 3 rather than ME1.

Gotta agree with that assesment. A lot of fanfiction just gives its characters what they need (i.e. overpowering the protaginast, making diffucult task simple, and generally changing the evirement to better suite the heros needs). In most books, though, you can visible see the universe throwing every obsticale it can at the protaganist. This makes all the sweeter when the pull off the biggest achievements of the centaury.

I recc'd ME:HR on TVTropes, and made an assumption; The Templars won the Invisible War. It seemed to fit, given SA politics and Ash and that cop's knee-jerk prejudice, but I'm wondering how close to the mark that was...

I beleive he already said the Templars won the Invsible War. I beleive it was in the author notes.

Damn fine synopsis you wrote there, Kaolong... But I'm sorry to say it, but that's not quite what happened. In fact, the canon events of Invisible War didn't happen because...well, because I didn't like the game quite as much as the original. It wasn't bad, but it didn't quite inspire me as much as the original and prequel. The divergence between canon DX and this crossover happens during Collapse, during which the Illuminati worked hard to bring back the world just as it was before Bob Page sent everything to hell in a hissy fit. Why did they manipulate almost everyone (or at least a very, VERY vocal minority) on Earth to hate and ban Augmentations? Mostly because they were fed up with the concept of people self-evolving beyond their ability to control.

I'll write up a piece of exposition on the state of Earth later on, but I'll share with you this juicy little tidbit:

The Order Church is around, ten million strong, and they've marked Jensen as the Devil.

So JC Denton sold out? Illuminati ending?

EDIT: DENTON! JC DENTON!

That's kind of odd. Denton spent the entire game cleaning up the mess left behind by all-powerful masterminds. I can understand blowing the Aquinas router to level the playing field or fusing with Helios to jump-start the Singularity, but joining the farkakte Illuminati and handing the power to the exact same megalomaniacs who ran the world in circles before handing it to Page?

@_@

That's hard to understand.

...I wouldn't quite say he sold out, but to say anything more on the matter would be spoiling :/

By the way, I'd totally insert a Xanatos pic here, but Peptuck might take it the wrong way.

Illusive Man? Is that you, JC?

Heh, physiopharma augs. Like the implementation of Quicksilver. How does a Dragon's Tooth (updated to modern spec or otherwise) compare to an Omniblade?

Also, it's a pity some people gave up on it right at the start...

I'd say the nanoblade and omni blade are more or less equal, performance wise, but Jensen wouldn't like either of them: They glow in the dark, throwing stealth right out the window when deployed. As for people leaving, well, you can't please everyone. Still wish they'd understand why I wrote Shepard's death the way I did, though.

Late chapter this week folks. Kinda struggling with Tali's Big Damn Rescue and how to make it dramatically satisfying.

I was rather confused on Shepards death, more on the end of, why is Nero-pus still needed? I'm pretty sure, they cured the need for Nero-pus, by when ever Deus Ex is based.

Its rare to see a Mass Effect story where Shepard isn't a hero. Much less one done so well. Good job

I cant wait to see how pissed Udina is going to be, a perfect case of what he was asking for in the worst way possible. The Turian councilor is going to love Jensen. Here's a human who other human hate and has a track record willing to go against human interest, but also has impeccable record for upholding Citadel laws and has glowing recommendations from the Turain C-Sec executor.

From the Council's point of view Jensen is the perfect Specter period. His own race alienated him so doesn't have any biased toward a particular race. He can put the interest of the council first and be as close to impartial as possible.

Welcome to SB! It's great to see another writer here for feedback.

What I find amazing in the story is that the ME train has been derailed. No more god-awful rehashes of the story.

Oh and that no one is the perfect hero.

Nope. The Denton Line of Clones is derived from Jensen Tissue Samples. That's the reason they could take nano-augs. The only person who didn't need Nu-poz for mech-augs in Jenson, and the Illuminati/MJ-12 have a very good reason to keep that suppressed.

On the other hand, I'm wondering how much of Deus Ex and Invisible war are cannon. We've seen the Omar, but nothing about Apostle-Corp or God-Emperor Denton.

You mean Neuropozyne? The Illuminati banned cybernetics a century before ME1, and once they realized they needed biotics in order to compete, Jensen was loooong gone. And besides, Nu-poz makes biotics dependent on the Illuminati.

That makes sense.

@Matsci: Thanks for correcting me on that.

Bet the Illusive Man will push Jensen-based genemod that will remove any Neuropozyne dependencies?

The problem is that the only man with the resources and mindset to spread the Jensen gene around was Sarif - every other powermonger on Earth was part of the Illuminati, who wanted to control the masses with laws, drugs, plague treatments... It's a big problem, both in the DX universe and in real life - the easiest form of power is dependency. Sarif was a mensch, and there's nobody in the ME universe to replace him.

Unless Sarif is TIM.

TIM believes in control - that the Reapers will advance humanity if humanity can "harness their power to control." That makes it impossible for him to be Sarif - Sarif not only refused to join the Illuminati, he planed on releasing the Jensen gene therapy for free.

Little chance of seeing either here then? Even when open combat is joined?

Oh, and since there are physiopharmaugs around, can you tell us anything about whether we'll see more mechaugs and nanoaugs?

Looking forward to the new chapter!

Or TIM is part of MJ-12 or the Illuminati.