Mobile Fighter Evangelion (AU/NOT a Gundam Crossover)

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  1. Vehrec HAB Mecha-Hater

    No, that's just a very poorly translated conversation. Deal with it.
  2. Meh, just my verbose opinion.... Sorry if it is something you have already considered----


    I would like to mention, that in my opinion, Gundams pretty much constitute their own characters & plotlines. First off, I feel the title of the series' shows how integral the Gundams are to the series'. Indeed, many of the series' have the mere presence of one change the battlefield dynamics. Like a yell of "it's a Gundam!". Or how each time a pilot launches, they say the name of the Gundam they are using. Or the need to chase or copy one for the other side's use, as in Gundam Seed or Gundam 0083: Stardust Memories. A good portion of many of the Gundam series' involve trying to copy or overcome the problems a Gundam causes. There is also the great amount of time & effort spent into animating the Gundams, as well creating so many different kinds. These are no mere tanks or jet fighters.

    G Gundam takes the characterization to an extreme, although more with a country's identity, but there is a reason why the SD Gundam series' exists. As well as the Gundam girl art. In particular, the Gundams, or any unique type, can be synonymous with a character, if not the only reason someone remembers that character. Like a red Zaku. Seeing the RX-87 getting destroyed or crippled is like seeing an important character dieing or being injured. In contrast, no one bats an eye if a Zaku bites it, just as with Red Shirts or Stormtroopers. Now with Macross, I think you have more of a point.

    Lastly, I leave with this thought - what would NGE be without the Evangelions? What comes to mind when an Evangelion is mentioned in a story?
  3. It is something I considered; the titular Gundam (be it the RX-78, the Wing Gundam, the Shining Gundam, etc.) shouldn't be reduced to the role of mere cannon fodder.

    Note that in this timeline, Japan has begun the development of mobile suit technology as a result of the Impact Wars (they're not quite super-duper like G Gundam, but they are functional weapons that are improving all the time...except they're bloody expensive, and NERV's getting all the funding, so they can't produce them at the prodigious levels you see with other Gundam series). Most of the suits produced have been, shall we say, prototypes: testbeds for the actual technology.

    I'll just summarize and say that the military forces of the world use 'Gundam' as the catch-all term for anything that's a mobile suit (to the annoyance of nerds everywhere).

    What WE'RE going to see is how Dr. Akagi applied the operational structure of the Evangelions (Pilot synchronization) to the Gundams, thus eliminating some control issues. I'll elaborate more on this in future chapters.

    And I will tell you this; when it comes time to reveal the Jet Alone, it's gonna be something...different.
  4. A big-ass tank?
  5. NHO Misplased Mechmind

    A unmanned BOLO. About Mark XIX in abilities.
  6. Stormwind Yuusha Destron

    So, we are looking at Victory here? Because I can't remember any other mass-produced MS that retained title of Gundam in mass production.
  7. Stavaros_Arcane All Arguments invalidated.

    Ultra Sonic I like the way you think. You have made the Angels interesting AND you are giving Penpen a giant robot. A gundam no less.

    many have thought that giving penpen his own mecha at some point. congrats on actually doing it.
  8. shanejayell Rebel without a Pause

    Go, Pen Pen!

    ^_^
  9. Neon Prodigy Aha! Is this our chance?

    Holy Santa Christ, I just finished reading up to this point in the thread, and... goddam!

    I haven't been this blown away by an awesome new fanfic since Nobody Dies.

    However, regarding the last snippet; Pen Pen is the gundam pilot, so why does the text say "launch the gundams"?

    Is Pen Pen piloting them too? Are there more intelligent penguins that make up a sort-of Penguin-Gundam-Force employed by NERV? Was the plural a typo?

    I don't know!
  10. <<ERROR>> Shadow Cabal Apathite

    Simple. Pen-Pen is a Newtype and he's driving them all remotely, like Jamil did in Gundam X.
  11. Foe Tohn Void Where Prohibited

    Or he's the leader of the Prinnies, and we're going to see a whole squad of penguin-piloted mechs d00d.
  12. I'll just say this much: when Second Impact occurred, all of the energy released by ADAM was at its highest concentration in Antarctica.

    What does this mean for the penguins that survived?
  13. Teenage Mutant Ninji Penguins?
  14. Whiteagle The Guardian of Freedom

    Well it means they're awesome SUPER Penguins, of course!

    ...Wait... Misato also survived Second Impact...

    ...And we don't know how long it took for her to be found...

    ...OH FRACK!

    MISATO WAS RAISED BY SUPER PENGUINS!!!
  15. ...That might actually explain a few things.
  16. Twitchy Artemis Between Science & Fiction

    Does that means she views penpen as her relative?

    Makes sense.
  17. I'll say this much; Misato's had Pen-Pen since before Second Impact.

    Instead of laying in a coma like in canon, Misato went on a bit of self-imposed world tour with Pen-Pen. Their first stop was "Everything Wants to Kill You" Australia.

    Do the math.
  18. Foe Tohn Void Where Prohibited

    Hmm, carry the four, divide by cucumber... Huh, looks like awesomeness and badassery to me.
  19. Do you think she's even aware of how she's acting?

    /Lymph Node-A, NERV-1, Tokyo-3/

    BEHOLD! Mankind’s ultimate fighting machine: the synthetic life-form, Evangelion Unit-01!

    Even though time passed and things changed, Shinji was grateful that some constants existed. One of them was his father.

    The other was the visage of Evangelion Unit-01, still menacing after all these years.

    The only part of the Evangelion that was visible was the head, clad in an indigo helmet fashioned after that of a samurai: two ridges spanned from the back of the head towards the front, fanning out and forming thick plates by the jaw. Protruding from the forehead was a similarly-colored horn that had a green ring about its base; thin and sharp, it looked perfectly capable of goring a battleship. The actual maw of the colossus was colored cornflower blue, the jaws shaped to form a monstrous scowl. The rest of Unit-01 was submerged under the red coolant, save for the massive shoulder pylons. However, even they were locked into place within specially-crafted slots in the wall; all in all, given the hydraulic arms that were fixed upon its shoulders, the Evangelion looked more like a sealed beast than a weapon of war.

    Shinji wasn’t thinking about any of that.

    Nor was he paying attention to Dr. Akagi, who had launched into a boisterous speech espousing the scientific virtues (“Capable of generating, with a sufficiently high sync ratio, the metaphysical construct that can render an Angel vulnerable to conventional weapons!”) and vices (“That we decided on bipeds is still vexing, but in the end, Square Cube SHALL BE VINDICATED! HAHAHAHAHA!!!”) of the Evangelion.

    Instead, his focus was exclusively on the eyes of Unit-01, cream-colored shards amidst black metal, bearing blank pupils that seemed to be looking directly at him. As they always did.

    No matter how many times he had seen Unit-01 face-to-face, she would be looking at him.

    Misato noted Shinji’s intense stare. “You okay? I mean, I know it looks kind of freaky, but it won’t bite.” When Shinji didn’t respond, the Lieutenant Colonel became worried. “Hey Ritsuko, I think he crashed.”

    Immediately falling out of her tirade, the female scientist tapped the side of her cybernetic monocle, turning away from Misato and towards Shinji. “Then allow me to press RESTART!” A bright red flash erupted from the monocle.

    GAH!!!” yelped Shinji as he faltered, nearly blinded by the flash. For some reason, the spots floating across his vision were shaped like tacos and ears of corn. “What was that for?!”

    “To get your attention! We have no time for blue screens of death! That…can come LATER!

    Shinji stared incredulously at Misato, who simply mouthed ‘roll with it!’
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  20. Terrace Insane Slacker

    Weird. ND!Ritsuko, what do you think?

    ND!Ritsuko: I want to beat my head against the wall due to how my counterpart's acting.

    That bad, huh?

    ND!Ritsuko: It's like someone simply noted that I'm one of the heads of Project E, which logically means I'm smart, and just decided, without verification, that I'm one of those kooky mad scientists who'd make corn on the cob that would get up and attack people. And really, the MAGI having a personality consistent with my mother and nagging me? What's up with that?
  21. Given the recent snippets from Nobody Dies, I think ND!Naoko would get into a ham-off with MFE!Ritsuko.
  22. Remember the snippet that started it all? Here's the initial bit, remastered!

    Dr. Akagi immediately calmed down, seemingly unaware of her idiosyncratic demeanor. “At any rate, we don’t have much time.” A few tremors shook the chamber, indicative of the battle taking place above. “We have to get Unit-01 moving.”

    “I know, it’s just…” Shinji straightened up, looking back at Unit-01’s face. “…it’s just been a long time.”

    It has.

    That voice. Shinji quickly looked up, eyes gazing upon a well-lit balcony. There was a cloaked figure, silhouetted by the light…but the voice was unmistakable. “…father…?”

    At that moment, all of the lights in the room turned off, plummeting them into nigh-total darkness. “WAH! What the-? What happened to the lights?!” yelped Shinji.

    Moments later, they clicked back on.

    AH!!!” shrieked Shinji as he fell backwards, startled by the fact that his father was standing right in front of him. “Bu-bu-bu-what the, how…wha…?!”

    Gendo Ikari mentally smirked. Impression made. Mission accomplished!
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  23. Whiteagle The Guardian of Freedom

    Ah Mobile Fighter Evangelion... You and your Bat!Gendo...
  24. Terrace Insane Slacker

    MFE!Ritsuko: BEHOLD! I have made love to this machine! And now, upon retrospect, I ask why...

    ND!Ritsuko: (backing away slowly) I'm sure someone thinks that's pretty neat. So did you do that for science, or...

    MFE!Ritsuko: NO, it was free! And it was drunk, it didn't know what it was doing!

    *Cyborg baby bursts out of MFE!Ritsuko's patented Iron Womb*

    MFE!Ritsuko: My metal boy!
  25. Fixed. :3
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