Discussion in 'Creative Writing' started by ajw, Jan 23, 2012.
Would they even realize, what with all the augmentations the average Tau'ri might have?
excellent read, keep up the good work
Some TM are humans, also theses people offer an engine than opens the entire galaxy to them.
Could they build a jump gate but works similar in nature to Stargate? The shadows did build linked gates so potentially possible.
Aye... Good update..
Will re-read this tomorrow when I can...
If Rivendell was built as a colony ship. Why does it not have the genetic sequences necessary to create another earth? Similar to the Genebanks in Titan A.E. which contained every lifeform on earth as well as several million samples from the healthiest humans.
Great to have another chapter, but there were three things that were off-putting to me.
1. Arwen told Allison about the situation then Allison told the Admiral the same thing - in story this is pedantic as not much time has passed since the characters are briefed on the problems, for the readers its redundant data dump.
2. You said Rivendale had 28 hours of shield life left in the void, and it the journey time was minutes by hyperdrive. Even if the scouts were on station for only 3 hours before they had to give the yay or nay, its definitely a step the Admiral would have pressed for.
3. Rivendale has landed, with the shields no longer having to contain the atmosphere against a vacuum - they still have to deal with biological worries on the new planet considering a proper survey has not been conducted. And you stated that the other grids can cover at a reduced capacity when the Pier 4 grid is shut down.
Looking forward to the Technomages inclusion, fun times ahead.
Maybe but if it wasn't there and the admiral agreed to move the city without having all the information people would probably complain about that and to me personally it would not feel at all right. I'm sorry if its a bit of a data dump but from my perspective it would have been wrong to not include it.
A good point there. Though bare in mind that they're probes have been searching for more than twelve hours and this is the first habitable world that they've found in that time. While 28 hours seems like a long time its not really when you think about it. Landing on it was the best option for them at this time to repair the damage to the city as the thinking was as long as the planet is suitable for now they can land, do the repairs they need to do, then if need be move again.
Again a good point.
However the Tau'ri aren't quite the same biologically as we are. A few dozen generations of genetic engineering to improve lifespan, introduce the ATA gene to the whole population, improve basic intelligence and health combined with the use of medical nanites makes it very difficult for bacteria or viruses to have any effect on them. That's not to say they don't get sick just what would be a serious possibly fatal illness to you or me would at most be an annoyance in the way a mild cold is.
Indeed especially when the mages realise that the Tau'ri are humans - just with some minor biological differences caused by both genetic engineering and the fact that they're from a different universe, an example of those biological differences is Tau'ri can't be scanned telepathically. All a teep scanning them would get is the mental equivelent of radio white noise as the mental energy of a Tau'ri is on a slightly different frequency to that of a Earther. Kind of like the difference between AM and FM radio.
Why not just have the ship's AIs exchange the data and him reading them when she calls, or doesn't the flagship have an AI?
Why the sensors of the Asgard and Tau'ri can't detect the Tehnomages ship?
Finally caught up... beautiful update.
Even the TechnoMages are suitably impress with Rivendell's tech level..
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This bothered me too, just a bit. Not so much the ship itself not being detectable, but why an active scan (and thus the deflection of it) went undetected.
I wanted there to be some party in technology levels. The stealth device on Alwyn's ship - and by extension all Technomage ships - is designed to include being invisible to subspace scans (many of the First Ones have subspace scanners) and the scan wasn't deflected off - that would be like setting off a flare - instead the scan bent the sensor beams around the craft so it remained undetected.
This isn't to say however that it will work forever its just the stealth systems the mages use is somewhat different to the ECM and cloaking systems Tau'ri sensors are designed to deal with. Of course when they find out about it there is nothing to stop the Tau'ri adjusting their systems to correct the oversight.
The flagship doesn't have an AI neither do any of the warships the only other AI with the Tau'ri fleet is Pearl onboard the Northern Horizon, the reason the Achilles and other warships don't have AI's yet is the top military brass have resisted the notion of putting an AI on a warship.
Though if the Tau'ri are indeed stuck in B5verse long term they could redress that and create warships with their own AI's.
Nothing wrong with that. Reminds me of the time the SGC had to look for a cloaked scout ship in orbit. Part of the reason they haven't found the technomage because they don't know to look for him. The fact that the scanners can't find him doesn't reflect badly on the Tauri. A civilization that has prioritized staying hidden from the Shadows as part of their development.
Nice to see an update. Your rewrite is better than the old one, but I'm concerned that it's going to take you two years to get to the position of the Taur'ri meeting and interaction with the B5 races like with the original.
Also, what happened to the Thirdspace Halo version? I was actually more interested in that version because I'm more familiar with Halo than Babylon 5 and I very rarely see a halo crossover with a powerful humanity entering the Halo universe and fighting the Covenant. Also you left it at quite a cliffhanger.
It's explicitly mentioned in one episode that Atlantis' sensors record a lot more than they actually display to the users. This filtering is required given the utterly insane amount of data they would be able to generate, but they keep sufficient raw sensor logs that people can go back and add some event to the warbook and Altantis will correctly report when it detects that type of event again.
The trick of course is knowing they need todo this.
It will take as long as it takes. One thing I've learned over the years that I've been writing fanfics is you cannot rush things.
Believe it or not I am tempted to restart that one as well using the revised fleet from this version of thirdspace.
Is the switch from metric to imperial units deliberate? Technomages do metric, Tau'ri do imperial except for water depth which for some reason is in metric?
I can never get the metric conversation between miles and kilometres right which is why there is the imperial measurement there.
thanks I didn't know about that website.
A simple google search of the conversion will automatically work out the conversion and display it above the search results. For instance:
"820 miles to kilometers" returns "820 miles = 1 319.66208 kilometers"
Just a thought about the whole mental white noise thing, an easy way to explain it off would be as a result of the ATA gene. I mean their mentally connecting to their data systems for the B5 telepaths it could be the equivalent of picking up a phone thinking your going to get the usual analog dial tone and instead you get hit with sound of a modem.
Or a whole bunch of voicESALLTALKINGATONCEGETITOUTOFMY*thud*
nah, Version 1 already showed that its just white noise even to Vorlons. Plus hearing a modem is annoying not debilitating.
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