Muchas gracias, señora Laluzi! Yes, that'd be funny. But I plan things a little differently... :drevil: I'm going to have to fix things again, it seems. Taking many many liberties with many many things that should not be nabbed? Bad, bad writer. Teach me, you must. Edit: changed a few things in the latest library snip, added a small bit for clarification... if you squint you might catch it.
Well, I knew it had Latin roots and literally meant 'unable to be conquered'...more or less...didn't know it meant the opposite when you took off the prefix. But hey, you learn something new every day! Cool. (I've always wanted to learn Latin.)
You should add something like "And don't think this excuses you from doing your homework!" in th end.
@Kuranzyan: The first line extends too much - split it off into different sentences. Also, keeping with Alex's personality of brevity and lack of melodrama, the last few lines, his monologue, should be significantly shorter. KISS works well here, methinks.
I'd probably leave the last sentence to just a hissed/resigned 'Teenagers ...', along with some mild introspection, but maybe that's just me. Still, you should, whenever, possible, try to keep Mercer's musings limited to his own mind - he prefers to speak less, according to your own story. Otherwise, it's fine.
I'm liking this. As for the Mercerwank, I started a thread not too long ago pitting Mercer against Sgt. Schlock from Schlock Mercenary. Neither got weapons or anything other than their own bodies, and Schlock won.
Ah so they do go dust and he can eat them they just taste like shit. Is the dust highly energetic? Or is this significatly less effecient. Here's hopins the aliens(non violent demons) get the fuck out of dodge before alex finds him self a 'guilt free foodsource'.
Vampires give him a roughly human-weight amount of biomass, which isn't much but it helps take most of the edge off his hunger, so to speak. Most demons aren't that emotionally attached to the things they do - exceptions exist, of course, but those are few and far between.
Any reason Mercer isn't just going to a butcher shop or something and just buying raw meat in large quantities? I mean, this is Sunnydale, nobody will notice anything unusual.
What happens if Alex snorts the ashes left by a vampire after it dies? I have this funny image of Alex gathering the ashes and organising them into rows before producing a straw and sniffing them. Demonic mythical high AHOY!
"You keep buying entire cows from us and have been a good customer for a long time. But where does it go, Mr. Mercer - you are not a pet handler and the circus hasn't been in town in decades?" "...I hold a lot of grill parties up north. The local bikers are usual guests." Maybe there is a difficulty with getting imported meat because the Evil Mayor Handwavium?
Given that the town has a reasonably large human population despite the equally large numbers of demons and vampires running around... I'd say it's not because of the Mayor. Though that might just be me.
Alternate response: "I'm really a horrible shapeshifting tentacle monster that requires flesh to sate my hunger" Sunnydale Syndrome takes over, and no more problem.
That's only when he's been around for a few months and finally notices it. "No, really, I am." Cue Scooby gang: :wtf:
Who the hell is insobiods?! I'm somewhat new, but I really don't think we're supposed to advertise anything!
You're not. This is the kind of thing that (probably) gets you banned. Then again, if you make an account just to advertise your products, that's not something that'll really matter to these guys, yeah? EDITMonshroud
