A Cape in Konoha (Worm/Naruto AU)

Chapter 1

Morgan Arc

The Breaker of Tropes
So this plot idea hit me hard. I have recently revitalized my interest in Naruto after re-watching Shippuden and getting into Boruto. While the theme may seem a bit cliche with a "mc reincarnated as Sakura trope" but I hope to put my own unique spin on it and make it an interesting read.

As always I do not own any of the characters.

I now have fanart! I am so happy that LUFTRITTER, Galler , and mdkcde on Imgur decided to draw some pieces for this story! The content of it is a spoiler so click on it at your own risk.










A Cape in Konoha

Prologue:

Opening my eyes was the first clue that something was wrong.

One does not simply “open” their eyes after being shot in the back of the head after surrendering your sanity to a multi-dimensional parasite to kill a pseudo god.

I was supposed to be dead, or at the very least living the rest of my life as a vegetable.

Instead I woke up in a small bedroom covered in a soft blanket. In addition, the entire room was painted pink of all things.

As a lifetime lover of more subtle colors even before the bullying, the offensively bright color hurt to look at.

Pressing a disturbingly small hand to my head I take deep breaths to calm myself and think on the situation.

First, I was in an unknown room in what appeared to be a young girl’s room.

Second, I was alive and lucid, which suggested that I had been saved. The question remained on whether me being here was by choice or chance.

Third, I could not sense any bugs, meaning that my shard had either been removed or my power was being blocked somehow.

‘Considering my last memory was being shot in the head…I can say it is probably the former.’ I muse with a wince, slowly uncovering the floral printed bedsheet from my legs. To my dismay they were much shorter than I was used too.

As a girl who had shot up like a weed during puberty, being back under five feet was a novel experience as I got up from the bed and tested my weight on the ground.

Approaching a mirror at the far wall I stop dead as I gape at my new body.

For one I was short, really short. It looked like I was only around seven to eight years old. I was wearing a bed shirt, long enough to act as a pseudo dress with an image of a shuriken on it.

But that was not the most important thing about the image.

No.

Not in the least.

I could handle being seven again, there were powers in the world that could do that. In fact, there was a famous cape in China who could make you look any age,

What I could not handle was the fact my hair was now an even brighter pink than the walls.

Stunned, I robotically lift my slight fringe to look at the roots of my hair, despairing at the fact that the strands were pink down to the follicle.

I don’t know how long I stared into the mirror, but I flinched when a voice broke me out of my stupor.

“Sakura-chaaan! Are you awake? Breakfast is almost ready!”

… “What the fuck?”

“SAKURA!”

…​

I stared with a deadpan expression as Mebuki Haruno, this bodies mother, raged at Kizashi Haruno about teaching impressionable children bad words.

The two were certainly odder than my parents had been.

The matron of the family had burnt yellow, borderline orange, hair.

The father had a dull pink, nearly gray hair styled to look like a flower.

‘You two…should have never had a child.’ I decide, shoving a bite of rice into my mouth. The meal consisted of a bowl of rice, a small grilled fish and a bowl of soup.

While I did not know much about other cultures, having spent most of my life in a city where being non-American was actually a health hazard, I could still recognize the signs of Asian influence.

‘Am I in china?’ I wonder idly as I take a tentative bite of the small fish, finding that it tasted sort of like tuna.

The argument seems to be winding down, with Mebuki sitting down in a huff and Kizashi rubbing the back of his head awkwardly as he begins to eat.

“So, Sakura. Looking forward to starting the academy?” Kizashi asks, obviously trying to break the awkward silence that any argument creates.

‘School?’ I think with a hidden grimace before nodding. If I really was five years old again school was obviously inevitable.

“Ahh how nostalgic. I remember my first day at the academy.” Mebuki simpers, a hand on her cheek as she reminisces “I remember thinking it quite boring at the beginning. But you should remember to pay attention Sakura-chan! You only get one chance to become a ninja after all.”

‘A what?’ I blink before responding “Why did you think it was boring…mom-chan?” I tilt off awkwardly, not knowing what the -chan, really meant at the end of a word.

Mebuki laughs a bit “Aww that’s so cute, you are mixing the old and new language together. Remember Sakura-chan, only use suffixes when using Ootsuki language and at the end of people’s names.” She lectures.

For a moment I’m painfully reminded of my own mother, who as an English professor had often corrected any improper use of grammar spoken near her.

I wrack my brains for what the Ootsuki language could mean and come up blank but by some instinct I respond “Hai Kaa-chan.” I reply.

‘How did I know that?’ I wonder as the Haruno matron looks satisfied.

“Well I guess we got off topic, the reason I found it so boring was because I never wanted to be a ninja. My true passion was in trading!” Mebuki explains with a soft smile.

“Yes, your mother really traded the life of a ninja for a life in the Caravans!” Kizashi giggles.

“Kizashi!”

I ignore their byplay, focusing on my own thoughts, which once again turned to my situation. ‘Ninja…like Oni Lee?’ I wonder, remembering the teleporting assassin who had plagued my early years as a villain in Brockton.

‘I need more information.’

“Mom? Can I go to my room to play?” I question, cranking up the cuteness factor of my new body to level 10.

Mebuki appears to melt “Of course sweetie! Just remember you have to go to bed early since you have to be at the academy by seven!”

Nodding I head upstairs back to the offensively pink room.

After closing the door, I immediately go to a small desk in the room, opening drawers and cabinets, pulling out any book or journal I could find.

Most were colorful children books, but I struck gold at one book forgotten in the back of the closet.

The cover was a dull gray with a language I vaguely recognized as kanji was inscribed upon it.

‘The Complete History of Konoha by Homura Mitokado.’ I read, instinctively translating the kanji into English.

‘Konoha?’ I internally question, translating it to Village Hidden in the Leaves. I trace the abstract leaf design underneath the letters before cracking the book open, looking at the index.

1. Warring Clans Era

2. Shodai Hokage Era

3. Nidamine Hokage Era

4. Sandamine Hokage Era

5. Yondaime Hokage Era

6. Sandamine Hokage Era Pt.2
“Fire Shadow?” I question, flipping through the book as I start absorbing information about my new surroundings.

Skimming through the first and second chapter I stop my reading as I think about what I had learned, ‘Well, I certainly am not on Earth. This may be some warped version of Japan, but I doubted it. The locations, names, and culture were just too different.

There were similarities, such as the prevalence of Daimyos and the fact that apparently the word ninja was a pseudonym for a cape, soldier, mercenary, assassin, and spy rolled into one.

‘Konoha is like a city with the protectorate instead of the government in charge.’ I decide, making the comparisons to what I was reading with what I was familiar with.

Before the village system, families or “clans” operated like gangs, providing protection in exchange for services.

Flipping the book to the last two chapters, I could read up on what happened between later, now I needed to understand the most about the current world was like.

The picture at the start of the 2nd to last chapter proved once again that this was not my world. It was clear that the culture was distinctively Asian, but the man in the photograph was the most European looking man I had ever seen.

Golden blond hair with bright blue eyes, the fourth Hokage looked to be an Empire 88’s wet dream.

The chapter was the shortest in the book, seeing as Minato, despite his legendary skill, died only a few years into his reign at the hands of what sounded like an Endbringer.

The Kyuubi was proclaimed dead but I had my doubts. If the bijuu were anywhere near as strong as the trio from Earth Bet, then I would not be surprised if they were biding their time somewhere.

The next chapter revealed why the Third Hokage had two chapters, seeing as the man had retaken his post after the tragedy.

'Which means either the man is that good or there is no active contender for the Hokage seat.' I theorize.

The last chapter did not have much information, but I did learn that the world was currently in a ceasefire after the last world war had devastated many of the other villages.

Closing the book with a loud snap I place it back on the desk, thinking about what I had learned. The entire book was filled with propaganda, omitting any of the actions Konoha may have inflicted and emphasizing the acts that the other nations committed.

The book did not give me the full view, but it did give me enough to fill in the gaps. Konoha was a meritocracy, with the strongest in the village declared the leader, who would have final say when it came to village matters. Below the Hokage were the council of elders and the council of clans who could contest with the leader’s rulings.

‘So, a meritocracy with a sort of hereditary democratic background to preserve it from total anarchy.’ I muse, trying to link the example with anything I had known back in my world.

Nothing really came up except the old tribal ruling styles of Africa and the Native American chieftains.

Another thing that the book emphasized was the danger of this new world. Konoha had been founded roughly sixty to seventy years ago and the world had seen three wars and countless small skirmishes. The strongest could go against Endbringers and everyone had a superpower.

Whats worse was that I was no longer Weaver, Skitter, or even Kephri, former warlord of an entire city, slayer of Alexandria and head of the Boston Wards.

No…

I was a young girl of seven with pink hair.

Looking back down at my young body and the lack of any of the muscle and training I had put myself through back on earth and took a deep breath.

‘I have a lot of work to do.’



-Konoha Academy-​


It turns out that Konoha was misnamed, the village was more of a city than a small town. If I had to guess, then the village was not much smaller than Brockton.

Another oddity was the strange state of technology in this world. While most infrastructure, clothing styles, and transportation indicated that this world was still in the medieval period, there were odd additions to technology that made no sense.

TVs, radios and an eclectic mix of other electronics that shouldn’t have been invented until electricity was discovered.

I didn’t understand how it was possible, but I was grateful that the world was not completely in the dark ages.

Walking down the dirt road, I kept my eyes sharp as I examined everything about my new environment.

“Sakura-chan, you seem much more attentive today! Getting ready to be a great ninja?” Kizashi chuckles, walking at a sedate pace next to me.

I wince at the comment. Already Sakura's parents were seeing that something was off about their daughter. Last night I had thought long and hard how to treat the Haruno family. There were several options available. I could try and separate myself from them as much as possible, pretend to be their daughter, or a third option that I was leaning towards was a slow shift in personality.

From Sakura’s journals, the girl was a bit of an airhead and a classic girly girl type personality.

Needless to say, I was pretty much the exact opposite. So, short of breaking this body’s parents’ hearts to pieces, I would need to adapt my personality over time to something I was more familiar with.

But for now, I had to play the part of the little girl on my first day of school.

Looking up at Kiza-tou-san I respond “Yup! I am going to be the best ninja ever!”

There, that sounded childish enough.

It seems to have worked as father gave a large grin, a thumbs up, and we continued our walk.

Looking up at the large cliff that the city was built against I recognize the four faces from the book I had read last night. The monument reminded me of Mount Rushmore, just made out of a light brown than the distinctive white marble of the Earth-bet version.

‘Hashirama Senju, Tobirama Senju, Sarutobi Hiruzen, and Minato Namikaze.’ I list off as I put the faces to the names. I wonder how the Endbringer fights would have gone with those four at our side. A man who could create an entire forest in seconds, another who could create a flood in a desert and so much more.

The four were easily Triumvirate level, perhaps even above that.

“And here we are! The bastion of childhood dreams and education!” Kizashi announces with arms spread wide as we stop in front of a large red and white building.

To be honest it did not look like much, but it was still leagues better looking than Winslow. For one the only gang signs I could see were the Konoha leaf and there was no litter in every corner.

‘Of all the things I hate about this situation…is school.’ I wince. I never had good experiences with the education system back in Earth Bet. From rampant bullying to disinterested teachers, I had experienced it all.

‘It won’t be like Winslow…I won’t let it.’ I swear, walking slightly behind the taller man as we enter the courtyard, where a bunch of kids my age were gathering in front of a podium.

“Go on and line up, someone very important is going to give a speech to welcome you to the academy.” Kizashi says, patting me on the shoulder before moving over to the other parents.

I watch him leave before turning to the crowd of young kids. There were about thirty or so students, some more distinctive than others. I try to pay attention to their faces and any distinguishing traits. Some stood out, such as those with clan emblems. But most just blended into the background.

After a few moments of waiting a woman in green vest and dark blue underclothes stepped onto the podium, “Attention all students, please line up in rows facing the podium, the opening ceremony will begin soon.”

The kids scramble to line up, pushing and shoving until by some miracle we were all lined up correctly. I ended up standing in the back, a kid with a gravity defying ponytail in front of me.

The chatting kids hushed as an old man walked on to the stage, his presence silencing even the most high-strung kids.

‘So, this is the Hokage…’ I think, observing his weathered face and flowing white and red robes. The second oldest Kage ever to hold a seat and known globally by the monikers of the “Professor” and the “God of Shinobi.”

The Hokage takes a moment to collect himself before speaking “When the tree leaves dance, one shall find flames. The fire’s shadow will illuminate the village, and once again, the tree leaves shall bud anew.”

‘A poem?’ I guess, finding the words to be oddly melancholic.

“This poem has been inscribed into the hearts of every shinobi who enters these halls, and every shinobi who fights to defend our home.” Hiruzen explains, folding his arms behind his back “The Will of Fire is not just an ideal, as I hope each and every one of you will come to understand in time. For now, remember that you all are the Leaf’s most precious resource and beacon that will pave our way forward into the futre. You are the ones who will stand before our enemies and protect your friends, loved ones, and fellow shinobi.”

His stern visage melts into a soft smile “Those of you that graduate and take up arms to protect our village will earn the eternal gratitude of not only me, but our ancestors and future kin. For it is you that has made the foundation and continued existence of Konoha possible. However, if it turns out the life of the shinobi is not for you, It does not matter. For what you do after you exit these halls, either as a shinobi, merchant, writer or even a simple farmer. No matter what road you end up taking, always remember you are a proud citizen of this village and your efforts serve to water the great tree that protects us all.”

The clearing is dead silent as everyone absorbs the words from the Hokage, thinking on the seriousness of what they were preparing to do. I break apart the words of his speech, finding the hiding meanings and warnings within.

The man had a way with words. He conveyed the seriousness of their career path in an inspirational way while also reassuring those with doubts that failure was acceptable and even commendable.

“Bah! Don’t wait for an old man to ramble on about the future. Today is a day of the now and not the when! I am sure your teachers are anxiously awaiting to cram as much knowledge as they can into you. So why don’t you hurry on inside!” Hiruzen breaks the thoughtful silence with a kind smile.

The children cheer, the spell broken as they rush past the suddenly pale instructor.

I sedately follow, knowing that rushing would only get me caught up in the mob of toddlers. As I walk, I glance at the Hokage, observing him as he speaks with the various academy instructors, the benign smile on his face never wavering.

Unfortunately, I had been disillusioned with authority figures too many times to truly believe the Hokage was just a kindly old man. No one in the profession of killing made it to his age without being ruthless.

I would not be surprised if the man could kill someone with that same expression.

As if sensing my gaze, the man turns, his eyes meeting mine, the fiercely intelligent gaze of the village leader pinned me in place for a few moments before he closed his eyes, smiling kindly as he gestures with his hand for me to head inside.

I turn away and make my way inside, heart beating frantically as I make my way to the classroom.

‘What…was that?’



“Hokage-sama?”

Hiruzen reaches into his robes and pulls out a pipe, lighting it with a small hint of fire chakra “That girl with the pink hair…what is her name?”

The academy principle scratches his hair before pulling out a binder, flipping through several profiles before stopping on one “Pink hair…pink hair…aha. Sakura Haruno, age seven. No clan affiliations besides a small connection with the Yamanaka. Her mother is a merchant who often deals with Kusagakure and supply the clan with some of their preferred plants. It is also of note that her mother is a member of the Mother’s Association and quite skilled in Taijutsu. While more suited to shinobi life than most civilians, she is not quite worthy of note.”

The third Hokage ponders this information. A fresh academy student with no shinobi background with eyes like those?

‘The last time I saw such eyes on one so young…was Itachi…’

“Principle.”

“Hai?”

“Make sure Sakura gets sorted with the class of clan heirs. Something tells me there is something…special about the girl.” He orders, trusting his instincts that there was something was off about the innocent looking toddler.

“As you say Hokage-sama!” The principle bows before excusing himself, rushing back inside to follow his orders.

Puffing on his pipe the leader of Konoha turns to head to his office, the faces of each young student burned into his memory.

‘May this generation’s flames burn brighter than any before.’

AN:
Like it? Too early to tell? Please let me know in the comments. I started writing fanfiction from Naruto and I am quite excited to return to this world.
 
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Not much to say so far. It's not a fundamentally bad premise, but "Taylor in Naruto's world" is not really a new either. It's good to see she actually managed to get a pretty decent basic grasp of the society and how it is very much so a marked improvement over what there was before, but still, it was a bit too much of an info dump and a bit too much tell and not show, specially since we the readers will nearly certainly already be familiar with the basics of Naruto, so there's no need to tell it for our convenience either.

Overall, watched for now, but it's too early to tell if it will be worth keeping up with or not.
 
Kinda split on this, it is well written and interesting but Taylor feels far too unconcerned with the fact that she just effectively killed and replaced a seven year old girl. I do want to see where you plan on taking this so I will be keeping an eye on it.
 

TheWraith97

Lord Protector of the Realm
Hmmm... it does make sense that there would be multiple classes of the same age range considering how large the forces of each Village is shown to be at times. It also makes sense that there would be one that has the Clan Heirs specifically seeing as they are part of the future of the Village's politics. Although, I would appreciate it if you don't delve too much into the Taylor angst like some here will tell you to do. It's dragged down many a story to have GM Taylor spend several chapters angsting over something that can't obviously be changed.

The language thing on top of her thoughts about the culture and looks of people are interesting tid bits though. I don't recall too many stories that have inserted characters that really think even this much about how weird the Naruto world is in some ways.
 
I like it.

Nothing stood out to me as wrong grammatically.

I just think it's a little weird to have her become bilingual and translating stuff from one to the other. But it probably a good way to fill people in who don't know Naruto about some things. I also feel like she should of thought about how her name meaning cherry blossom. How will she react to all the punny names? If your going to translate some stuff you should probably translate it all for consistencies sake.
 

Ridtom

Good. Bad. I'm the man with the Blaster
Yeah, like many Insert into Another Character, the fact that it completely killed off Sakura and is now in a young child’s body is brushed off, which is very annoying.

Taylor compartmentalizes, sure, but she’d be pretty damn horrified about her situation
 

Kolarthecool

Burning bright in the dark of night.
Eh, needs work. It's well written sure but the characterization isn't all that good. I mean, this is a Taylor that just got out of the war to end all wars. Her brain was pretty scrambled, the fate of her father and friends is unknown, and she just went through some really traumatizing shit. None of that was shown here at all. Heck, she pretty much glosses over the bullet to the head and the loss of her powers in a few sentences with little to no reaction.

This may as well just be an SI/OC in Sakura than saying it's post-GM Taylor.
 

globalwarmth

Ruining the weather.
yeah she is going to struggle without a cheat bloodline of her own.
there is a lot of biggaton power level escalation by the end
 
Well this sure is a thing. Think I'll reserve judgement a bit until the plot progresses more as while this rewrite of Naruto's plot is likely to avoid some of the stuff I rather dislike about Naruto as a series (basically everything to do with relationships and Sakura mostly being irrelevant for the parts of Naruto I managed to care about before I gave up on the series), I've got doubts that it'll hit many notes I like to replace in naruto beyond just not doing the things I dislike. Not that it's a knock against the writer, I just have particular tastes.
 
I have a feeling that this will be an interesting read.

Also, please don't make Sasuke into an inssuferable little shit this early, at this point the Uchiha still exist and he was just your average (relatively) kid until the massacre happened. It's not really that important but it just bothers me otherwise.

I'm looking forward to Taylor's internal struggles when it comes to Naruto. She'll undoutedly help him because he's a lonely, osctraziced (did i write that right?) orphan, but then she'll have to deal with Naruto pestering the hell out of her. It'll be amusing at least.
 

ChaoticSky

Corvid Muse
‘Konoha?’ I internally question, translating it to Village Hidden in the Leaves
I figure your probably just paraphrasing here. But theres three forms of address for hidden villages. [name], hidden [name] and village hidden in the [name]. In so far as i can remember, and it has been a while, [name] is more casual (konoha/leaf, kumo/cloud, etc) while Hidden [name] ( Hidden Leaf/Konohagakure, Hidden Cloud/Kumogakure) is more proper, with the complete 'village hidden in the [name]' being formal (Village Hidden in the Leaves/Konohagakure No Sato, Village Hidden in the Clouds/Kumogakure No Sato). So it should either be;
‘Konohagakure No Sato?’ I internally question, translating it to Village Hidden in the Leaves
or
‘Konoha?’ I internally question, translating it to Leaf

That said, as a general rule i would strongly suggest against including gratuitous japanese. Use english names for everything as much as you can. Nothing annoys in reading Naruto fics like having to go figure out what the balls 'Narakumi no Jutsu' is. So what you did there? thats great, keep doing it. Make a few references to what shes reading in japanese, but translate it and keep using the translation.

f the bijuu were anywhere near as strong as the trio from Earth Bet, then I would not be surprised if they were biding their time somewhere.
Taylor knew six EBs, not three(Behemoth, Leviathan, Simurgh, Khonsu, Tohu and Bohu). Im not sure if she was personally aware that there were additional ones beyond that though.

=

Also like a few other people have been saying, this doesnt feel a great deal like Taylor. Not so much the lack of freaking out in my case, Taylor has always been fairly hard ass, but more the way shes responding to things. Taylor is mercilessly goal oriented, with a pathological need for control. Taking things as they come feels wrong. I think like it would suit her 'voice' more to state a goal and work towards it, even if that means shifting her goalposts as she learns more. I think trying to figure out exactly what her position is, and not just to the extent that shes a girl named sakura, would probably have been a fairly intensive process. And probably do some obvious things to assert herself over her situation, even if its as simple as rearranging Sakura's room to be more to her own personal tastes.

That said, i look forward to seeing more and hope you do well.
 
Theme Response: Chapter 8

Morgan Arc

The Breaker of Tropes
Eh, needs work. It's well written sure but the characterization isn't all that good. I mean, this is a Taylor that just got out of the war to end all wars. Her brain was pretty scrambled, the fate of her father and friends is unknown, and she just went through some really traumatizing shit. None of that was shown here at all. Heck, she pretty much glosses over the bullet to the head and the loss of her powers in a few sentences with little to no reaction.

This may as well just be an SI/OC in Sakura than saying it's post-GM Taylor.
I do agree with you, but as this is the prologue I dedicated a bit more to world building than any emotional responses. I always think of Taylor as a person who just refuses to think on things and strive forward. The greatest example of this being when she murders Alexandria and manipulates everyone to let her be a ward without even thinking about it. Next chapter will be more character building.

Not much to say so far. It's not a fundamentally bad premise, but "Taylor in Naruto's world" is not really a new either. It's good to see she actually managed to get a pretty decent basic grasp of the society and how it is very much so a marked improvement over what there was before, but still, it was a bit too much of an info dump and a bit too much tell and not show, specially since we the readers will nearly certainly already be familiar with the basics of Naruto, so there's no need to tell it for our convenience either.

Overall, watched for now, but it's too early to tell if it will be worth keeping up with or not.
Really? I have not seen too many Taylors in Naruto world. I didn't think it was that popular. Well I know what I am going to be reading next if there are quite a few out there. Regardless I hope mine will be unique and an interesting read with it's competition.

Well this sure is a thing. Think I'll reserve judgement a bit until the plot progresses more as while this rewrite of Naruto's plot is likely to avoid some of the stuff I rather dislike about Naruto as a series (basically everything to do with relationships and Sakura mostly being irrelevant for the parts of Naruto I managed to care about before I gave up on the series), I've got doubts that it'll hit many notes I like to replace in naruto beyond just not doing the things I dislike. Not that it's a knock against the writer, I just have particular tastes.
I agree, I think Sakura's potential was wasted in the authors quest to make team seven the Neo-Sannin. While Sakura's perfect chakra control is good for medical jutsu, I have several plans that I believe will put her on par if not above her peers.

I have a feeling that this will be an interesting read.

Also, please don't make Sasuke into an inssuferable little shit this early, at this point the Uchiha still exist and he was just your average (relatively) kid until the massacre happened. It's not really that important but it just bothers me otherwise.

I'm looking forward to Taylor's internal struggles when it comes to Naruto. She'll undoutedly help him because he's a lonely, osctraziced (did i write that right?) orphan, but then she'll have to deal with Naruto pestering the hell out of her. It'll be amusing at least.
I personally do not like bashing characters. I prefer to write them as the original author did, albeit influenced by my new plotlines, So Sasuke will be the loveable little shit before he turns into the not so lovable little shit.

From the responses so far, it would seem people would like more Taylor-esque personality. Well, I will say that is what I am focusing on in the next chapter and this was more of a brief introduction to the situation and her current mindset. Her primary goals will be flushed out in the next few chapters as well as her motivations.
 

ChaoticSky

Corvid Muse
Belated thought; another good way to assert herself would be her clothing. Maybe trade the dresses for hoodies. Its very taylor and would serve to cover her neon pink hair.
 
I agree, I think Sakura's potential was wasted in the authors quest to make team seven the Neo-Sannin. While Sakura's perfect chakra control is good for medical jutsu, I have several plans that I believe will put her on par if not above her peers.
I don't think that making Team 7 into the Neo-sannin is a bad idea, but the lack of initial drive for Sakura on top of her not being really competitive with her boys at the start just ruins all momentum. To say nothing of the tumor that is romantic interests that are had as well as the team having no fucking cohesion. The fix I've been keeping in my pocket for the day I feel masochistic enough to rewrite some part of Naruto is to give Sakura a dream of being a respected civi-born ninja (which would make her relationship with Ino more interesting as her being a clan nin with relatives I can have disapprove of being friends or more with Sakura due to her being a civie) and to make the team promise to support each other in their collective goals so Edge mc Eyes doesn't have a reason to run away in what should have been the most predictable betrayal on Leaf Village history (not that I ever had much faith in their ability to run a ninja society as their ability to produce child soldiers is dogshit for a society to basically runs on it) as he's got his friends/teammates to train with so they can gang up on his brother and murder him with the power of friendship and then get on with their lives helping Naruto become Hokage.
 
Interesting intro.
Looking forward to more.

Wonder how will Taylor react to the Aburame Clan.
She's going to become best buddies with her Aburame classmate. They will geek out over their shared knowledge of entomology and everyone else will be weirded out. I think Pink!Taylor would also get along with whats-his-name from the Inuzuka clan. If she can get along with Rachel, she can get along anyone in his family, too.
 
Like it? Too early to tell?
It's promising so far. A bit odd that Taylor feels like she's coming in post-Brockton Bay instead of post-GM, but that's a common problem in most post-GM fics these days and is easily ignored.

I like it so far, I will say. Taylor as Sakura is quite novel and I look forward to how she sets the stations of canon on fire and dynamites the rails.
 
‘The last time I saw such eyes on one so young…was Itachi…’

“Principle.”

“Hai?”

“Make sure Sakura gets sorted with the class of clan heirs. Something tells me there is something…special about the girl.”
That part makes no sense. It's not like he talked with her, she was looking his way like most of the children do during speeches and sometimes afterwards. It looks like he projected killing intent on a child starting the academy, such children should drop dead from shock. If that's not the case, he had no reason to single her out in such a setting, which feels more like a "special snowflake" sort of reasoning than an actual case.
 
Golden blond hair with bright blue eyes, the fourth Hokage looked to be an Empire 88’s wet dream.

The chapter was the shortest in the book, seeing as Minato, despite his legendary skill, died only a few years into his reign at the hands of what sounded like an Endbringer.

The Kyuubi was proclaimed dead but I had my doubts. If the bijuu were anywhere near as strong as the trio from Earth Bet, then I would not be surprised if they were biding their time somewhere.
This is odd to read. She's just shown up, but there's a convenient book about Konoha's history? Okay, fine, but then she thinks the Kyuubi isn't dead? She later knows the Hokages are incredibly strong, so why wouldn't she accept that they could kill this thing called a Tailed Beast? I think she'd reserve judgment until after she's talked to some people at least.
 
This is odd to read. She's just shown up, but there's a convenient book about Konoha's history? Okay, fine, but then she thinks the Kyuubi isn't dead? She later knows the Hokages are incredibly strong, so why wouldn't she accept that they could kill this thing called a Tailed Beast? I think she'd reserve judgment until after she's talked to some people at least.
I mean, why wouldn't she have a history book? She's a student. I can see your point with the part about the bijuu though.
 

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"Emotions are prohibited"
A good way to make this fic different from the many "mental reincarnations into Sakura fics" is to make sure it doesn't die before the chuuni exams. A lot of them don't seem to go past the Wave arc even.
 
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