Mistworm (Worm|Mistborn)

Awakening 1.1
Taylor triggers as a Fullborn. She has the abilities of the Lord Ruler and the knowledge of how to use Hemalurgic spikes. In the absence of naturally-occurring God metals, she can use the ashes of dead capes to make atium or lerasium. If you don’t know what any of that means, that’s okay. I’ll do my best to describe everything as the story advances, and will be adding my own bits of lore where canon is lacking. A short description is that Taylor can either literally eat bits of metal and then ‘burn’ them for certain powers, store attributes like strength or speed inside of metals she’s touching, or make metal spikes and stab people to put their abilities/powers inside the spikes, and then stab someone else to give that person whatever is in the spikes.



I’d been so certain I was a Tinker.


Diagrams and images and descriptions had flooded my brain, slamming into it with the force of a freight train. For once, I’d been glad to be in the hospital. When I untangled all the information and learned the truth, I’d been disappointed. Tinkers could do so much, especially if they collaborated. I would’ve had to join the Wards and deal with all the teenage drama that entailed, but with a lab and materials that wouldn’t have been as much of a problem.


The doorbell rang, and I bolted, throwing the door open and snatching the package from the confused and wary delivery man before he could set it down.


“Thanks!” I said before slamming the door behind me and rushing back inside. I reached my room and tossed the brown box on my bed, then stretched, taking deep breaths. I needed to get in shape, especially if I was going to be patrolling on the streets and taking down crime.


Online, capes said powers were instinctive. They might seem weak at first, but there was always a trick to them. Skidmark was a prime example, first classified as a mere Shaker two until he started layering his lines to make inescapable prisons and portable railguns. That lined up with my abilities. I had prepackaged instructions in my head for how to use my powers and a vague feeling of what they did, but couldn’t get any more information without the metal I needed. The screws of my bedframe didn’t count, it had to be a certain alloy, and ordering that was expensive, especially without letting Dad know.


I opened the package. Inside were four vials with thin steel flakes suspended in liquid and a two-inch sphere of the same metal. I’d considered adding a spike as well in case just having it told me more about that ability, and had been almost relieved when it turned out that I barely had enough money for just the ball and the vials.


A vial turned over and over in my hands. I stared, shrugged, tugged the cork out and downed the contents. The liquid tasted sharp and left an aftertaste. A moment later, I felt something. It wasn’t like a trigger, more like a furnace I could stoke in my stomach. I concentrated and blinked as blue lines appeared, leading from all around me to my center of mass. I followed the largest one, which connected to my bedframe. Dad still wasn’t home. I Pushed. The bed scraped along the floor, and I went flying.


I picked myself off the floor, rubbing at my new friction burns and glaring at the bed. That … was probably something I should’ve expected. I’d picked steel based primarily off my wallet, but also because of the feeling it gave me. There were sixteen metals my powers used, but there were three ways I could use each metal. The one I knew was Allomancy felt positive, somehow, like it wanted to be used, and came with the wordless knowledge that using it with steel would make things move. I’d confirmed that worked, so I spent the next few minutes on top of my bed hanging on for dear life as I burned through my swallowed steel just in case I could get metal poisoning from having steel in my digestive tract.


That had been kind of disappointing, but I shrugged it off. I’d been expecting telekinesis, and I’d gotten telekinesis. Just … metal-based. And only in a straight line. That pushed me back just as hard. I was more interested in what I could do with the second use. Feruchemy, the neutral one. I picked up the little steel ball and could tell that it would accept what I put in, but it wasn’t eager, not like Allomancy. I let a trickle of something pass from me to the metal, then when nothing happened a flood. I sighed and stood up, but when I moved it was slow. My limbs moved like jelly, and the clock on the wall ticked and spun at a frantic pace. I cut off the transfer, and the world returned to normal.


Except that now there was something inside the steel, waiting for me to take it out. I drew from the tiny well and watched as everything slowed down. I picked up my notebook from on top of my dresser. It moved strangely, and when I let it go it was still creased where I’d held it. Slowly, ever so slowly, it fell, drifting to the ground. Then the flow of energy from the ball evaporated. The notebook hit the floor with a thump and I jolted in surprise.


Yeah, I could definitely work with this. I’d originally wanted to start with gold—not for its Allomantic use, which translated from pure feeling to English was roughly “self-past-ghost,” but because I could use Feruchemy with it to store health. If I was going to beat up supervillains, I’d definitely need healing. Especially with Lung wandering around.


But super speed, and especially super speed that didn’t come with any of Velocity’s limitations? Sign me the hell up.


I was grinning for hours after dinner as I sat on my bed, legs crossed, the world flowing forward without me. Tonight I’d store speed, and tomorrow I’d fight crime. The costume in the basement was a thrown-together piece of garbage and I had access to one-sixteenth of the powers I was willing to use, but for the first time since Emma’s betrayal, I was anticipating tomorrow instead of dreading it.
 
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Lazypika

Sleepy...
This'll be interesting. Taylor's going to have to make a lot of her own metals, isn't she? She'll need the specific allomantic alloys, like tin/lead pewter as opposed to tin/copper/etc pewter. Of course, since she can use both allomancy and feruchemy, she'll get very powerful very quick once she gets settled in.
 

Phyrexian

Cousin of Machines, twice removed
I like the premise, buuuut

My limbs moved like jelly, and the clock on the wall ticked and spun at a frantic pace. I cut off the transfer, and the world returned to normal.
Steel unfortunately only stores physical speed, mental speed is stored in zinc. Fortunately zinc relatively cheap, so if you're inclined it wouldn't stretch imagination to have Taylor be able to afford a zinc nugget for storing, but no flakes just yet if you want to avoid emotional allomancy at this point.
 
I feel like it's way too early for her to go out yet. In canon it takes her three months iirc, and even though a lot of that time was spent working on a costume, she still took the time to plan. She didn't practice with her powers, true, but I think that's more because she thought there wasn't anything much to practice with the bug powers. Here, she decides to go out with barely anything, when she knows she has so much more power accessible. And after only trying it once, and seeing that she's not very proficient in it. I guess I'd buy it if she had something awful happen to her in school and impulsively decided to go out, as in canon, but that doesn't seem to be the case here.

I think you could have the same effect (her going out with only a fraction of her power) if she didn't know which and how many metals she could use. She could go out believing she could only use one or two metals, and then have to discover others through trial and error. That could make her progression to being OP (which will definitely happen) more organic.

On the other hand, knowing does allow us to jump over the trial and error part (which I believe is boring for some readers), but then I really don't see her going out like this.

Other than that, I'm very excited for this story. It will be interesting to see where you take it. Especially the hemalurgic spikes - I read Mistborn a long time ago, but from what I remember, the person who puts them in has a degree of control over the subject? Actually, now that I think about it, that part of Taylor's power is pretty similar to Teacher's. The heroes won't take that well, if they ever find out.
 
Watched because Mistborn. And you can draw parallels between Taylor and Vin, both characters that I love.

But as Phyrexian said, you need Zinc to store Mental Speed. That is what will allow Taylor to perceive things as if time has slowed. If you don't, then you only use Physical Speed in your Steel jewellery. Which is still great, but more in the sense of running very fast. It's the first chapter, so you can quickly correct it if you want to.

So basically, she's going on her first night out with a Ferruchemy' store of Physical Speed and three vials of Allomancy's Coinshot. So, a Mover 1, Blaster 1 combo. Good start if she's just facing goons, less so for about any Villains in the Bay. Interesting synergy of power here: if she meets Hookwolf or Kaiser, and since they are both heavier than her, Taylor can propel herself out of dodge.

If she doesn't join the Undersiders (backed by Coil) or the Wards, or New Wave or any other gangs for that matter, getting new metals discreetly is going to be tough depending on what you seek. Plus you need the metals and alloys to be as pure as possible. I could see a Taylor here who scavenges the Docks and the Boat Graveyard to collect scrapes of metal, transport them to her little lair, equipped with a little smith/jeweller/metallurgist workstation to recycle and repurpose all she can.

Knowledge of Hemalurgy tells me we could potentially see enhanced goons and/or capes working for/under Taylor in the far future. You just don't renounce to a third of your powers.

EDIT: I also sense a lot of piercings in Taylor's future
 

Idirexii

Conceptual Artificer
So I actually agree with you, but then a ton of people would complain about 'Its a Wards Taylor story?! Auto boo out of spite!'
Surely there could be a twist? She could usurp the Dockworker Union or something. Telling her dad doesn't necessarily mean that she joins the Protectorate. She could go and steal powers and then give them to her minions.
 
Awakening 1.2
Note: Steel does store mental speed. There's always a certain degree of overlap between the Physical, Cognitive, and Spiritual realms. Zinc just stores mental speed to a vastly greater degree, and also stores acuity or wits. Basically, zinc excels in super fast on the ground battle planning. Certain scenes in the Mistborn series just wouldn't make any sense if steel flat-out couldn't store mental speed.






Today had been a total flop. School was Emma, as usual, and when I finally went crime hunting There was nothing to find. I even used some of the power in the steel sphere to look for crime—a steel-mind, my power called it—which meant I had less speed available when I finally went out and fought lung.


Fought. Lung.


I had a reason, of course, I wasn’t going to just try beating up probably the strongest cape in Brockton Bay to see if I could. I wasn’t about to let him kill children, no matter how long he chased me.


I put on another burst of speed as I turned the corner, accelerating to one and a half, two, three, four times my usual speed for a few brief seconds in the hopes of finally losing him, when he appeared above me wearing wings. Because of course. I was just running by now; I had no hopes of actually winning a fight with Lung with only a steel-mind, especially when it felt like it might actually run out sometime soon.


“Hey, maybe we can work something out,” I said just before dodging a jet of flame. I got back to my feet, glad I’d had the foresight to tape the steel-mind to my chest, and kept running. If only I’d waited until I could order brass, then I could just store the heat he blasted me with. Or gold; knowing I had a way to heal would make this whole situation a lot less stressful.


“Like, how about you just kind of lightly singe the kids instead of killing them?” I tried.


He roared and descended toward me with an open maw. I squeaked and tapped my steel-mind as hard as I could until the only sound was my beating heart. Nothing that big should be that fast. I spoke to myself between pants as I jogged, shoes slapping against the pavement.


“Okay. Can’t run forever. What can I do?”


My mind was fuzzy, my recent memories a blend of fear and fire and desperately tapping my steel-mind when he got too close. I hadn’t had time to slow down and plan, and now a part of my brain was screaming at me to stop using my speed now or else he’d catch me and I’d have none left and I’d get burned, and what would Dad think.


“Got flakes. Can burn them?” I mumbled.


Wait. That was actually a good idea. I scrabbled at the pouch where I kept my three remaining vials of steel flakes and tipped one down my throat. I focused, and blue lines appeared all around me. A huge, thick rope of a line pointed directly behind me. I turned, and there was Lung.


I panicked, holding my hands out as if to ward him off as I jumped and Pushed against his scaled form, wings stretching out behind him, and sailed off into the sky. At that point I was extremely glad I was tapping steel, because otherwise there was no way I was touching the ground again without splatting against it. The blue lines were thin and faded this high up—I was even above the distant skyscrapers Downtown.


I drifted, passing a pigeon in midflight, wings moving with excruciating slowness. It was scary at first, but after a while it became boring, and then calming. It was less a desperate attempt to save my life and more of a game, using Allomancy to Push against metal below with feather-light touches, smoothly decelerating my fall to earth.


When I touched down on the roof of a squat building with a flat roof and handy fire escape, I was almost disappointed. The day had been terrible, but up in the air with nothing but me and my thoughts, it all seemed inconsequential. Who cared if Emma hated me now, if Sophia shoved me down the stairs or Madison kept one of her sycophants near me at all times? What did it matter that Lung wanted to kill me, or Armsmaster had seen my descent?


Who cared? I could fly.


“Are you a villain?”


Four words were all it took for reality to come crashing back down. I glanced down. My costume wasn’t the best, sure, and I could see how the hockey mask might evoke the image of a bank robber, and I suppose the all-black outfit didn’t help. But it wasn’t like I’d been doing anything wrong. Why couldn't he have asked if I was a hero?


“Always wanted to be a hero. Just my luck all the good guys think I’m evil. It’s the mask, isn’t it,” I said, slumping against the wall.


I looked longingly at the fire escape. It was only a few feet away, and what was super speed for if not escaping awkward situations? But I was running really low, and what if Lung found me as I was going home?


“Hmph. Be careful. Lung has been sighted not far from here.”


“Uh. Yeah.”


He mounted his bike, but didn’t drive off. “Name?”


I opened my mouth. Closed it. He didn’t mean my civilian name, of course, he wanted my cape name. Which I didn’t have. I thought. It didn’t take long, I had no ideas.


“Hero … Person … Girl?”


“…You may want to rethink that name.”


With that, Armsmaster drove off. I buried my head in my hands, then took it out a minute later. It just wasn’t the same with a mask on. I had the opportunity to speak to Armsmaster himself. He was my hero, and eventually my favorite after my Alexandria phase. And his last comment to me was that I needed a better name. He wasn’t wrong, but still.


I’d been planning on brainstorming ways to get cash if I got out of the whole Lung thing alive—a choice few metals would have allowed me to get away easily, if not turn the tide until he grew enough to overpower me again. But now I was going to do something else with what remained of the night.


I was going to pick a name.
 
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I’m curious how this Taylor got Lung to grow that big. I could see her leading him on a chase, but his growth is typically tied to anger, active fighting or perceived threats. This Taylor does not seem that threatening, and teasing him into growing that much would be a scene I’d love to see.

As an aside, I hope the unnecessary inclusion of Medhall is not the beginning of that tedious trend to always use important people and places from canon regardless of whether it makes sense.
Why could he have asked if I was a hero?
"couldn’t"
 

Mrsalty

Sipping tea
You know I don't think people are going to be happy about her using cape bones unless you're going to pick a fight with lung every time you need them
 
I'm kinda curious how you'll do the god metals, if you're going to use them at all.
Parahuman remains can be turned into God Metals, with Scion as the atium-equivalent and Eden as lerasium.

I’m curious how this Taylor got Lung to grow that big. I could see her leading him on a chase, but his growth is typically tied to anger, active fighting or perceived threats. This Taylor does not seem that threatening, and teasing him into growing that much would be a scene I’d love to see.

As an aside, I hope the unnecessary inclusion of Medhall is not the beginning of that tedious trend to always use important people and places from canon regardless of whether it makes sense.

"couldn’t"
I've seen a trend in Worm fanfiction to portray Lung as weak. How could someone who grows as slowly as he's often written to face off against the entire Protectorate team and win? How could he survive Leviathan? I'm decided to make him much more powerful so that as long as he's technically engaged in conflict, he grows, and the longer it's been since he's faced conflict the faster it happens. As to the Medhall inclusion, isn't it one of the largest skyscraper-like buildings in the Bay? If not, I'll edit it out.
 

ccstat

Old Friend
“Hero … Person … Girl?”
“…You may want to rethink that name.”
Seems like a pretty descriptive name to me, and I rather doubt it's taken. Armsmaster is just being his judgy, abrasive self here, I'm betting. Don't let him get to you, Taylor! You can keep that name if you want to!

It sounds like she's going to have to experiment with each metal to figure out how they work. I'm guessing that she doesn't automatically know about compounding until she discovers it herself? And when you say she gained knowledge of hemalurgy, does that include an understanding of bind points, etc? Or constructs like koloss? I don't see Taylor going for something like that immediately, but there's always Contessa, Endbringers, or the S9 to force situations where Taylor can rationalize bad decisions.

I'm particularly curious about how a coppercloud would interact with the Simurgh, or an aluminum-mind with other master effects.
 
Would that be the body in general, or just the Gemma? On that note, would people who have yet to trigger count as "mineable" ore, or just triggered parahumans?
I'm going with the logic that the Entity's power just kind of suffuses the entire body after someone triggers. Taylor can then melt down the entire body to form one bead of atium or lerasium, but this doesn't work if the body's been subjected to a Hemalurgic spike.

Seems like a pretty descriptive name to me, and I rather doubt it's taken. Armsmaster is just being his judgy, abrasive self here, I'm betting. Don't let him get to you, Taylor! You can keep that name if you want to!

It sounds like she's going to have to experiment with each metal to figure out how they work. I'm guessing that she doesn't automatically know about compounding until she discovers it herself? And when you say she gained knowledge of hemalurgy, does that include an understanding of bind points, etc? Or constructs like koloss? I don't see Taylor going for something like that immediately, but there's always Contessa, Endbringers, or the S9 to force situations where Taylor can rationalize bad decisions.

I'm particularly curious about how a coppercloud would interact with the Simurgh, or an aluminum-mind with other master effects.
She gets a small description in the form of a feeling of what each metal does. Compounding is one of those 'tricks' that she does have to find out herself, yes. She does have an understanding of bind points and a vague idea of what each one does, and also has knowledge on the Koloss and other related constructs. Basically, think of what the Lord Ruler knew in regard to the Metallic Arts and she will have an inkling of it if she really thinks about all the implications.
 
There's been several attempts at Mistborn fics and they all died an early death. I wish you luck, OP.

That said, I second some concerns about Taylor going out with only steel in her belly (and tied to her torso, apparently) when she knows she's got access to more powers from relatively inexpensive metals. Like, sure, there's more or less no way for her to get an object that can serve as a gold metalmind legally - nevermind flakes of gold to quaff for Allomancy - but why wouldn't she at least try to get her hands on some of the cheaper metals? Iron and tin in particular.

Additionally, there is no way Armsmaster would just grunt and move on after encountering a new cape. He would at least try to figure out if they're willing to co-operate with the authorities, and depending on the response he'd either give the statistics soft sell or at the very least hand her a card and ask her to call sometime.

Lastly:
I hope you have a solid Watsonian explanation for Contessa not immediately stopping whatever she's doing at the time, yell "DOOR ME TO BASE F VIAL VAULT", grabbing a suitcase and just throwing it full with vials, yell "DOOR ME TO TAYLOR HEBERT" and forcefeeding Taylor spacewhalium juice while screaming "GOT YOU SOME OF THAT VITAMIN E (Technically L), IT'S WHAT YOUNG ALLOMANCERS CRAVE" as she reminisces on how this isn't even in the top 25 most random things PtV told her to do.
 
I've seen a trend in Worm fanfiction to portray Lung as weak. How could someone who grows as slowly as he's often written to face off against the entire Protectorate team and win? How could he survive Leviathan? I'm decided to make him much more powerful so that as long as he's technically engaged in conflict, he grows, and the longer it's been since he's faced conflict the faster it happens.
I don’t see how your "change" contradicts how his power is usually portrayed, or how any change is necessary to explain canon events at all. My point was also mainly how quickly he grew wings, since that is a very late-stage element of his transformation.

Here is how I understand Lung’s power: He starts as Brute 4 human looking person. This is slighly weaker than Aegis, but with added shaker rating from the fire. During fights he mostly grows scales and gains height until he is a 8 foot tall humanoid. (Also claws and a maw). In especially big or drawn-out fights he may eventually grow wings. He didn’t even start flying while taking on Kaiser, Fenja, Menja and Skitter at the same time, as a point of reference. As of start of canon it isn’t even public knowledge that he can grow wings.

Regarding Leviathan, I’ll refer you to the wiki: He let others fight him while he waited from the sidelines until he had grown enough. The reason he can fight hero teams to a stand-still is that they are not allowed to use lethal force and he is extremely hard to capture. Also, he didn’t win according to the wiki. He suffered defeats against all sort of groups and just managed to run away instead of being captured.

Long story short, the wings against Taylor are and AU element. It’s not a bad change in my opinion if you give him a stronger changer element instead of mainly being a brute, though. It’s a change, though.

As to the Medhall inclusion, isn't it one of the largest skyscraper-like buildings in the Bay? If not, I'll edit it out.
In Purity’s interlude she has difficulty finding the building because it looks just like all the others except for the logo. I’m not even sure it is a skyscraper in canon.
 
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There's been several attempts at Mistborn fics and they all died an early death. I wish you luck, OP.

That said, I second some concerns about Taylor going out with only steel in her belly (and tied to her torso, apparently) when she knows she's got access to more powers from relatively inexpensive metals. Like, sure, there's more or less no way for her to get an object that can serve as a gold metalmind legally - nevermind flakes of gold to quaff for Allomancy - but why wouldn't she at least try to get her hands on some of the cheaper metals? Iron and tin in particular.

Additionally, there is no way Armsmaster would just grunt and move on after encountering a new cape. He would at least try to figure out if they're willing to co-operate with the authorities, and depending on the response he'd either give the statistics soft sell or at the very least hand her a card and ask her to call sometime.

Lastly:
I hope you have a solid Watsonian explanation for Contessa not immediately stopping whatever she's doing at the time, yell "DOOR ME TO BASE F VIAL VAULT", grabbing a suitcase and just throwing it full with vials, yell "DOOR ME TO TAYLOR HEBERT" and forcefeeding Taylor spacewhalium juice while screaming "GOT YOU SOME OF THAT VITAMIN E (Technically L), IT'S WHAT YOUNG ALLOMANCERS CRAVE" as she reminisces on how this isn't even in the top 25 most random things PtV told her to do.
For why she's only going out with steel, it's escapism. She waited for weeks and only has access to steel, and will do basically anything to distract her from the disaster that is her life. As in canon, she never intended to go against Lung, or really any cape before she had a good supply of metal and thought that at least steel would let her escape any situation she wasn't equipped for. Flakes of Allomantic gold would let her Compound, but she doesn't know about that yet and the Allomantic use for gold is interesting but useless. As for why she wouldn't get any other type of metal, it's because she requires a specific alloy that isn't common. She had to do an expensive custom order just for the steel, she can't just pick up iron or copper of the ground and use it. She's more of a Tinker than she thinks, because she does have instinctive knowledge of how to make her alloys, but she figures that the way to go is just by buying them. It's expensive either way, and by buying her metals she has more time to go raiding drug dens and such for money. This is her logic, it's not iron tight. Armsmaster would usually interact with the new cape longer, but Lung is still on the rampage because Taylor just escaped him. He doesn't have time for a longer encounter. As for the spoiler, I'm not going to confirm anything yet but there are a few possibilities. Even the Lord Ruler couldn't do anything against Scion, and Taylor is nowhere near that level yet. Forcing a vial down her throat would just kill her since she already technically triggered. Or perhaps Taylor is in a long-term plan of Contessa's. As the saying goes, "It's all a Simurgh plot!"

I don’t see how your "change" contradicts how his power is usually portrayed, or how any change is necessary to explain canon events at all.

Here is how I understand Lung’s power: He starts as Brute 4, this means most things cannot instantly kill him. At this point, he can already put up a decent fight against any ground-bound cape in the city and survive most of the rest. At least, he cannot be put down fast enough to keep him from growing.

Secondly, his growth scales with his opposition and starts the moment he is in "conflict". Against typical parahuman enemies he will probably stay at Brute 5-7, where he is an 8 foot tall man with draconic features. As I recall, this is how he fought Kaiser, Fenja, Menja and Skitter in canon, though he might have started growing wings towards the ends against all of them together. At this point he is already one of the strongest parahumans in the city, especially with his shaker rating.

The wings are an extreme end-game power for him. As of start of canon it isn’t even public knowledge that he can grow wings. As for the Leviathan, I’ll refer you to the wiki: He let others fight him while he waited from the sidelines until he had grown enough. The reason he can fight hero teams to a stand-still is that they are not allowed to use lethal force and he is extremely hard to capture. Also, he didn’t win according to the wiki. He suffered defeats against all sort of groups and just managed to run away instead of being captured.

Long story short, the wings against Taylor are and AU element. It’s not a bad change in my opinion if you give him a stronger changer element instead of mainly being a brute, though. It’s a change, though.
Good point. In that case it's indeed an AU element.
 
Sorry, I posted as I was only half done. Only substantial change is about Medhall not standing out from the surrounding buildings. Also, it’s a very long way from the docks to the costly downtown, so Taylor should be able to fly through the whole city with a bit more metal.

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I can also recommend Life Ore Death as a good example of a superhero with Feruchemy as her main power. If this goes a similar road, Taylor will probably manage to outperform most parahumans soon. She won’t have as much time to fill her metalmind stores, though.
 
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Lastly:
I hope you have a solid Watsonian explanation for Contessa not immediately stopping whatever she's doing at the time, yell "DOOR ME TO BASE F VIAL VAULT", grabbing a suitcase and just throwing it full with vials, yell "DOOR ME TO TAYLOR HEBERT" and forcefeeding Taylor spacewhalium juice while screaming "GOT YOU SOME OF THAT VITAMIN E (Technically L), IT'S WHAT YOUNG ALLOMANCERS CRAVE" as she reminisces on how this isn't even in the top 25 most random things PtV told her to do.
One could argue that that particular Path is a blind spot because Entities are restricted in the PtV, and it therefore follows that Entity Juice is probably covered by the same restrictions.
 
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